OMG, i'm so sorry, i didn't notice that no reviewed and i just found this so i was gonna read it in one go. Well, i'm glad ur writing more stories, i loved chrys and this one's going good! as for some critiques, um little sp mistakes, but they don't distract from the story.
Author's response
Thanks for the heads-up on the spelling errors, where are they? I would like to know so that I can go back and correct them, I'm going to read it over now and correct them.
Oh, and the next chapter should be up by the beginning of next week. I've been really busy lately, so I'll try to update quickly.