Wow! This story is getting interesting! :)
BTW, this is some constructive criticism: Try spacing out your paragraphs (Some of your words are bunched together, and it makes it kind of hard to read), and spacing were the characters speak. Like this: "I love you Ryan, 'cause you're special!"
"I love you too Brendon!"
See? Makes a difference. But other than that this is a very good story and I hope to see more from you soon!
~~ StripesCO