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I have to admit that I wanted to positively rate this story for several different things.

I thought that the beginning of this chapter was an excellently written exploration of Harry coming to realize how attractive Hermione is. I also like how is is beginning to appreciate the beauty that is a teenage young woman and that some of them actually like to be looked at. It's also great to see how this new appreciation he has is affecting his three banes so far.

His voyeur sessions in the ROR are actually very interesting. You have managed to keep them from just being PWP interludes. They are providing Harry a glimpse of life outside Hogwarts, as well as being able to see people he knows in a different light from what they show when he is physically around them. The Marrietta and Cho scene went from just being girl on girl sex to showing Harry feelings and emotions that he doesn't recognize and it places possible future Canon actions in a different light.

The quidditch match was also well written. I like how you changed its tone and outcome. Angelina's place in history is assured as should Ron's confidence as a Keeper.

The washroom encounter with Angelina and Harry was a good mixture of a learning episode for Harry, as well as a realization for Angelina of just how bad Harry's life may have been.

I hope she follows up on that train of thought to some degree. I'd also like for her to notice his hand and to do something to stop it, if for no other reason than if her Seeker is one-handed it might cause them to lose a match. But I hope she would do it for better reasons, maybe she might work with Hermione to come up with something other than just soaking it in "essence of Murtlap".

All in all I thought that this was a great chapter and I hope that you continue this story as it is an original at Harry's fifth year and I'm finding the story very compelling and enjoyable.

Thanks for posting.