Well, this if the first time I have read these two chapters and I have to say that I really liked them. It's too bad you decided to abandon it. I think, if you cleaned up the grammar a little and maybe made Harry less talkative (like telling the teachers all he told them and what not, its a little too trusting for someone who has decided he no longer wants to be on the same sides with) and this story could be really good. I really liked the whole Goblin nation allegiance and Harry giving them an island in return, the idea was well done. I am sad to know you are not continuing it.
DG