When I start reading a new to me story, I read through all that is offered before reviewing. I also read through the reviews to try to keep from repeating others thoughts and/or ideas.
OK, first off, I love this story and definitely be putting it on my "alerts" list.
Even in the cannon, Harry has a tremendous loving and caring heart, so I have always felt him able to support a harem. Also in the cannon, the people in the DA classes would follow Harry into hell (direct quote) if he went there. It will be no stretch that the ladies of the DA would not find sharing Harry that hard to do.
Finding a story where the "smut" is not the reason the story was being told is special. Thank you. "I" think your interactions between characters, be it sex, love, gaming, or fighting, good people or bad, are always part of your plot line, put there to make the rest of your story more understandable.
I enjoy your expanding the cannon girls parts. I hope you will continue with Luna and Marietta. Finding more of why Luna presents the spaced face, she would not been placed in the Ravenclaw house if she didn't have a strong and intelligent mind. "I" haven't seen the penalty clause being included in your protection of the meeting room, so I am hoping you will allowing Marietta explain the pressure she is under from home and give her more support from the DA. Getting Marietta and Cho out of the closet and having Harry, and maybe friends, helping to strengthen the connection between them, "I" think would add a lot to the story line.
You have introduced the information that there is a lot more girls in the DA than guys. I look forward to seeing who you introduce and how they will interact with the hero's and bad guys.
Will you be changing any of the cannon slithering girls feelings about black and white magic?
Guess I had better pay attention ti "Wesley's" comment on dictating.
Thanks for a good read.
May the MUSE be with you!!!
Author's response
Thanks for another great review drifter! I actually have some of the next chapter already written, but I'm waiting to finish the next chapter of Unknown Memories before I start it again.
"Even in the cannon, Harry has a tremendous loving and caring heart, so I have always felt him able to support a harem."
Exactly how I feel. Hopefully we'll be able to actually see him use that heart coming up.
"Finding a story where the "smut" is not the reason the story was being told is special. Thank you. "I" think your interactions between characters, be it sex, love, gaming, or fighting, good people or bad, are always part of your plot line, put there to make the rest of your story more understandable."
Your most welcome. While I have fun reading just plain smut on occasion, I really enjoy it when there's an attachment to the characters. I agree, the characters really are the story. Why am I spending time reading it if I don't care if they live or die, fall in love, etc...
There will be more of Luna in the story. I originally planned for her to be the third girl to go into more detail with, but think she'll end up a few later now. I haven't figured out how I want her character just yet.
Angelina and Hermione will stay the major characters for the next chapter, with some mentions of Katie and Susan Bones. Both Katie and Susan will have much larger parts coming up. I'm going to try and make several of the characters, including Lavender and Parvati, actually three dimensional instead of just cookie cutter extras.
The situation with Cho and Marietta will be a little more complicated, mostly because Cho is still screwed up from the loss of Cedric and doesn't realize exactly what she wants yet. It'll all work out in the end though and Harry, and some of the girls from the DA, will have a large part in it.
"Will you be changing any of the cannon slithering girls feelings about black and white magic?"
One to start. Harry may be becoming more mature but he still has prejudices from his first few years. It'll take time, and help, for him to realize not Everyone is split into black or white, dark or light. Though he'll still consider a large portion of Slytherin evil, he'll start to realize not All of them are. That should start in about 2-3 chapters, when he's helping Katie.