Somewhat of a different approach to things, there, and fairly original. It bids to be an interesting story. Unfortunately, it's originality is let down by readability difficults; you really need a good beta for your stories. You've got some original ideas and the basic plotting looks at least adequate, but mispellings and wrong word usage detracts from that.
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