Review for Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts

Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts

(#) BenRG 2008-03-22

Okay, first let me get over my need to strange Ron. Okay, I'm over it. Instead, I want to take him out to a black hole and kick the little ** out of the airlock with a spacesuit and let him suffer the worst fate known to physics. Yeah, there are assholes in every world but to treat a friend and a girl that has feelings for you like that... I won't rant any longer. I think that the worst thing Harry can do to the Weasleys now is to ensure that they remain a impoverished joke of a pureblood clan.

Harry... Wow! What can I say about his power levels? He forced himself through the structure of the building (despite its wards) to get into Hermione's room. I think that Dumbledore needs to seriously rethink that threat to duel. Harry might have the raw power levels to overcome his much greater experience, probably explosively. Ever seen a Mk9 'Gate-buster' super-nuke go off in 'Stargate'?

I did like Harry's little poem/song. He is a sensitive boy really. Still, this will test whether any relationship with Daphne is possible: Will she be able to accept that Harry will go to his female friend when she needs him, even if that means breaking a date?

This is a great story. I check for updates every day.

BenRG's Rating: 8/10

Author's response

- Yeah, I've based the Hermione/Ron story here off a pair of friends of mine. He actually thought they were just 'fuck-buddies' (long before the term was coined) and she was deeply in love. When it collapsed (no where near as neatly as I wrote), I ended up holding her and singing bad breakup songs until she laughed.

- I had a lot of trouble with the 'forced entry' scene. What I wanted to do was emulate the classic 'Strongbow forces Stoneshaper Door to open the exit from Blue Mountain' from Wendy & Richard Pini's Elfquest series. But when I wrote it, it just didn't seem... right somehow, so I had him pass through the wall instead. I'm not sure I'm going to explore that much or not.

- My response to crying women has always been to try to get them to laugh... My singing usually get's that response....