Review for One Man Army

One Man Army

(#) CG172375 2008-04-29

w00t! I love pell-mell battles!

:D I didn't know Harry was the heir of Admiral Nelson! :))

You know, I have misgivings with Star Wars ships having broadsides, I'm more particular with the Kuat-style Arrowhead ships... But I'm just that much of an Imperial fan.

On another note: Just how FAR back is Harry's master from? I mean, even in Knights of the Old Republic there were rules against training non-infants. I'm slightly disappointed there was no indication of doubts from the master. (Plus I'm assuming Harry must have a lot of "dark side influence", given the fact that he has a magical scar and everything).

I'm also sad that the pirates were given less screen time. As other people have said, as soon as push came to shove they should've ran away. Also, I don't think a huge pirate fleet can be commanded by just one commander... I'm betting that this was ala Pirates of the Caribbean where Pirate Lords team up. If so, I would've expected more individual tactics. Not to mention some would've ran away sooner than others. :( I want a cool pirate character, that would be awesome.

And I'm nominating a kick-ass Wedge-type character. I want more characters that own even though they're not force-users.

Wait, female force? I guess I'll have to wait for that to show up in the story so I'll get what you mean.

Lastly, can someone do a fan-art of Clone female harry troopers? I'm curious what they actually look like, haha!

By the way, I really hope Harry gets a decent (if possible, Grand Admiral Thrawn level) antagonist. Every battle so far has been relatively easy.

PS: Needs more Harry-leads-from-the-front-lines. Show some Gryffindor courage! (Even though I'm Slytherin, myself)

Good fic! Love what you've done so far.

-- ChaosGhost

Author's response

Well lets see.... Master Qalsneek lived at the time of the Great Sith War. Meaning 4000 years before Harry was born. Remember this is not the 'actual' Jedi Master. It's his holocron, he can't sense the force within Harry unless he comes back as a force ghost. As for the Pirates, they are subject to pride and arrogance like us as well. Put yourself in their P.O.V. imagine yourself and a large group of your fellow pirates encountering Harry's Fleet. it numbers around 17 ships while you and your guys have almost over 100 ships... tell me this would you have thought you would win or not? "Pride before a Fall" that's what the pirates learned at great costs.

At the moment, the pirates mean little to me, I added them to deal with some loose ends that will develope if they are allowed to exist in the current story. Trust me, he will meet a powerful antagonist. But I won't revolve the story entirely around the two fighting each other. Remember, the Universe is massive! There are always bigger fish to fry.
For your Pirate character suggestion, I haven't decided on that just yet. Still thinking about it.... I could put in a Pirate character in with Harry, but then we would have to decide if it should be a male or female.
I prefer the old republic ships rather than Imperial ones, Yes I'm a republic fan! lol
I hope these answers will help you. Talk to me if you have anymore suggestions or questions.

Oh also, I can't have him lead from the front all the times. it will kill the realism of war and battle (mixed with sci-fi and Magic) in the story.