Heyhey
This is sweet. I like your writing. And i loved how you said "perspective" instead of "POV." That is cool stuff, dude.
Just one thing, do double quotes("...") when people are talking instead of ('...') I mean i guess you could stick to those single ones, but in real life books, they do the double quotes.
But honestly, you don't have to change that unless you want to. You're the writer. And a pretty good one too.
Update soon. I like the pairing...
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Crys
Author's response
Man, you don't know how much it meant to me when I saw that you reviewed. I actually squealed..Pathetic, I know.
I was so nervous when I put it up and automatically regretted it because I've seen all the awesome stories put up and was scared I'd get a load of hatemail..
But gosh, I had to do a double take when I saw people actually reviewed!
And thanks for the little pointer, I will use double quotes in future.
Thank you!