Review for Midnight Watch

Midnight Watch

(#) Alorkin 2008-05-09

An excellent fic! This genre is one I normally refuse to read, as most have Harry becoming an amoral bloodsucker, and I think we have enough politicians already.

Nicolas is, despite everything, a kind and caring father.

Le Croix wants to seem an uncaring snark, but you've given us enough to show he is deeply touched by the little waif. His devotion to his two 'children' shows more than he would like.

Nicolas should have opted for the silver bars...and ensured there were thirty of them.

Dumbledore is gonna go absolutely apeshit when he finds out: 1) Harry's gone, 2) Harry's been adopted by a vampyre, 3) his access to Harry's gold is cut off, and 4) there ain't a damn thing he can do about it. It's times like this that I truly enjoy fanfiction.

I wonder if he's going to arrange for a trial for Sirius, in order to get Harry back under his control?

Little Harry is in safe hands, and is, for the first time since his parent's murder, happy. What more does he need?

I was pleasantly surprised at Harry's language. I presume you have, or have had young children around. To many good stories are thrown off by someone using a two-year-old's language for a five year old, or an preteen's language for a small child, or worse, a random combination of both.

You commented to Dr. T, that Hermione is a brat at first. GOOD! It's about damn time. To many authors write her as a rule abiding milksop with little or no character beyond SPEW. I usually write her as confident and self-assured, but I consider temper tantrums as OOC. A little brattiness would be a refreshing change. It shows she's willing to explore her boundaries, and refuses to accept 'NO'.

Usually those who want to write Harry/Ginny make her out to be a pathetic whining, scheming banshee who's brains have leaked out her ears. (Hmm! Brings to mind book six.)

I really enjoyed this piece and so, I have added it to my alerts list in hopes of reading your convenience, of course. Alorkin

Author's response

I hate Vampire!Harry and Werewolf!Harry stories. I intend to have Harry stay fully mortal... though it won't be smooth. Since when does anything go as planned with Harry Potter?

Nicolas always was the good guy, despite being a vampire. :) And he was proven to be good with children, though fairly clueless, in the series.

LaCroix is a complex character. On one hand, he was the antagonist of the series, but on the other hand, his main ambition seemed to be to become a Pater Familias. Most of the scenes involving him all had him pushing Nicolas to accept his state and/or return to the Family. Think Mafia, only scarier.

Spanish dollars, also known as "pieces of eight" are solid silver. I considered silver bars, but in the end decided to go with the first universal currency.

Yeah. smirk I enjoyed completely thwarting all the evil things that Dumbledore usually does in these kinds of stories. I need to work on him more, because I've received a bit of feedback saying that he's falling a bit flat.

And lose that much face? Besides, the adoption records are sealed until Harry turns 17. Finding him now would be worse than finding a needle in a haystack.

Hm... How about a great education, knowledge of forgotton magics... Yeah, this is a Harry who'll be prepared for Voldie.

Thanks! I caught a good bit of flack for Harry's "accent". I worked daycare with two year olds one summer. Letters that they have hard times working their mouths around seldom change.

Ah, but wait 'till you see what the brattiness is about. Let's just say that Ron's dislike of Hermione at first might be a bit more justified this time around.

I'm actually not completely sold on making this H/G. It will be at first, but I'm seriously considering H/Susan at the end. It's a possibility, anyway.

I'll probably be updating next week.