(#) Arden 2008-05-12
Ignore the flames. They're usually trolls anyway. While there are some cliches in your story, it is pretty difficult at this point in time not to have some in Harry Potter fanfiction. The story is easy to read, there aren't any glaring spelling or grammar errors (which pollutes so much of fan fiction), and the story is easy to follow. If you and your friends are enjoying it, to hell with the nasty folks. You can't please everyone, so there's no point in getting upset about it.