"the last week was like a month for Harry,"
You stated a 60 to 1 ratio, (even if reversed). One week-seven days would be like 420 days to Harry. Probably need to adjust your time ratio.
The bit with Hermione was somewhat jarring. I doubt she'd break it off with him over getting wounded. Especially since it was her screw up. In any case she'd do it to his face, not in a note signed "Granger". I would investigate.
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