Review for Harry Potter and the New Powers

Harry Potter and the New Powers

(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-05-25

It seems that it's a re-occurring complaint about your chapters being on the short side. I've not seen much helpful suggestions either. What I would like to suggest is that you add more dialogue to your chapters. When you have more interaction, it brings more into the story as far as what is going on. Also, with added dialogue, you have the opportunity to describe your chapters point of view and underlying emotions. Food for thought.

Geovanni Luciano