FicWad

I'm getting speed-blind here. Slow down a bit, please. The tunnel-vision robs the story of many rather nice intricacies. Yes, i understand that this etch-a-sketch style is part of the allure of the story, but a slower pace and a few extra read-throughs before posting might be a good thing. Hint: Read the lines out loud, and think on whether real people talk like that. That should help with the extreme brevity. After describing something, clear your mind and read your description and visualize. Does it match? This will catch things like Tracy's hair. Just my two knuts.

Vanir