I'm really loving this story at the moment. It's sort of quite mysterious but at the same time descriptive.
I also like where the story line is going. I think you can go very wrong with a middle/high school fanfiction but yours seems like it's going to be really good.
The characters seem interesting and realistic and the story isn' too dramatic at the beginning.
The only thing I would suggest is that you maybe describe things a little bit more.
Anyway, great looking story. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Update soon.
Alice.