Once again I could draw a map:
Gerard is the fuck up jerk, everyone he knows is going to take Monica's side because she is a Saint, including Mikey,which is completely unbelievable, the Bob/Kara stuff is unreadable - you can't get close to those characters unless you are some 12 year old dreamily wishing for a boyfriend...
Not trying to harass you, it is just that you are a good writer and can do so much better.