Fine stroy...but you have to sepreate it into paragraphs! My eyes are going buggy!
Author's response
Thank you very much.... I really appreciate the review. but some reason that I wasn't able to do it the way I wanted it... but when I finally have the second chapterI'll try to have it in paragraphs... if you want it the way I have it... I'll send it to you by email...
Thank you again for reviewing my story...