"He was just on edge after that one show where a kid declared that they would loose their virginity to each other and never ever touch anyone else in the whole world ever after, if it was the last thing she did. He was paranoid. That was it. For sure. Besides, the restraining order still had five more years before he had to renew it."
That made me crack up, I swear. I read it like three times and it still doesn't get old. It just shows how crazy fangirls can get.
Anywho, now I must rant and rave about how AMAZING this first chapter is.
Ohyess.
I really like your characters. They are so-very lifelike, and you don't find many realistic characters around these parts much. So, I do appreciate that. :]
Like, Liz is the shy, worried one. Natalie is the adventurous one and Grace is a little sarcastic. :]
Very, very good start and I'm off to read the next seven chapters!
WOOT!
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Author's response
You have Liz, Natalie, and Grace characterized perfectly :)
i'm so glad you like this chapter/story so far :)