Review for Awake in a Dream

Awake in a Dream

(#) Pheonee 2006-08-09

Oh god. I nearly cried during that. (Call me what you will but I very rarely cry during stories.) I could imagine the heartache both of them would feel. I nearly, so nearly have a chokey throat too. Tries vainly not to sound like a huge block of Bega tasty cheese

The swearwords weren't too bad...Both bitch (A female dog) and bloody (The state of being covered in biological liquid consisting of red blood cells, white blood cells and platelets) have double meanings and I always try to look at them that way. Anyway if I were feeling that rotten I'd swear a lot too. (This coming from a girl who screams "Language!!" whenever someone says "crap" or "this sucks" and consideres the "C" word a deadly breach of human right.)

Huggles chapter So moving. sniffle Grabs the first person she can to sob into their shoulder jumps away staring at Neil who's screaming at the highest extent his girly voicebox would allow

PS...Yes I'm a nerd as well as a laguange, diction and grammar freak. That definetion of "bloody" was off the top of my head. I started reading the dictionary the other day. Helps make my very poor literary works a little better. Typos simply cannot be helped.