FicWad

Well, what to say, what to say.

The modernised Teen Titans are mostly unknown to me, as I've only ever read the first edition. I can't really comment on the TT-personalities. On the Magical side, Hermione commenting on another girl's figure is way OOC, but really, with some Lemon in sight, who cares? Hr/Rv? On the writing side, i could use more care. This feels a bit sketchy in places and the happenings in the story motivates a lot more words. A few more descriptions wouldn't hurt at all. Actually, it looks like one of my chapters in mid-development, before i flesh it out and space it with the little details called life. Now, it's your fic and all, but there's enough going on in each chapter to motivate a doubled word count. Brevity gives no extra points. As Argent is unknown to me, I can't really say anything than that the whole interaction there felt really rushed. Don't assume that anyone even knows who Harry is. A brief introduction to the characters might be a good idea, and it also allows you to change the necessary details.
Hint: set your spellchecker to British English and tighten it up a bit. I noticed a few errors, but it wasn't too disturbing.

I've not rated you yet. Let's see how the next chapter looks.
Puts the flamethrower down
You did entertain me, and I wouldn't write this kind of review for a fic without a strong promise.

Vanir