I know, you've written more since I've started reviewing, and I'll probably end up reviewing every chapter you've written, plus the ones you haven't written yet. I don't feel this is shit, I feel this has potential to become really really good shit, if not the BIG SHIT. And that is amazing. If I may critique, try to make your characters more "real". Try give them traits that allow your readers to connect with them more on a personal level. You're already halfway there, keep going!
Author's response
hmmmmmmm
i feel like your my eng teacher lol
thanks