"I" think you have written well and that the story is well worth the time to read it.
Having already read "Marriage Contracts", Technomage, "Businessman", and "Distaff Side", I should not have been surprised.
Your ability to take the cannon and find new ways to look age it is what fanfic is all about, but I really liked how you addressed things that really nagged in the cannon: McGongols and Dumbledores blinkers to what they don't what to see; Ron and Hermine's to major obvious opposites: brains, talent, willingness or not to work, etc\; and the fact that Harry and Hermione were a lot closer and more balanced match; AND that that the only reason Harry did not die on a suicide mission with Moldishorts was the Dumbledore died early of a bad case of stupidity.
I loved your your no shots fired, no friends and companions lost ending. I have been fanfic's for a couple years, and think that ending is unique.
Again, thanks for a very enjoyable read.
May the MUSES always be with you!!!
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