you know i dont get what is the problem with the people that are rating this story. im mean a -1?!?! what are they thinking? to me this story on a one to five should get like a 3.75. for a first time writer this story is very good. some of what these guys say is true but look at the guy that wrote the erigon books. the way he wrote it was the story was on the how much stuff he could fit into a book. his books are good but this story to me is better then the erigon books. whatever some of these assholes are saying dont let them get to you. their just saying the shit cause they know what youve written is better then what they could write or have written. keep the story coming!!!