Review for Potter's Surprise

Potter's Surprise

(#) stealacandy 2008-11-28

Phew, the old "Harry goes back in time and immediately bond wih Ginny Weasley on the deepest levels of ther souls" doesn't improve any by it being Hermione instead.

And the martial arts, yes, I can see that happpening. In fact, I Have seen that happening. I've seen it and seen it, over and over, in dozens of fanfics, and mostly I have yet to see it work. (With a possible sole exception, still have to see how that one'd turn out.) I'm growing weary of seeing it again.

But that's just me. Whatever knocks yuor boat, I say.

But then there's the story itself - it goes from descriptive (to a level) to sketchy, like you detailed an outline for the story, filled in a few bits, and then rushed off to post it without filling in the rest. Then again, I understand this is more a sketch than as tory, so probably it doesn't matter. But while offering a sketch, you should have gone into more details of what makes it unique, to differentiate it from the hunderds of other stories (and sketches mistakingly calling themselves stries) that use the exact same plot line (or sketch, if you prefer).


-stealacandy

Author's response

Thus why I stopped where I did. As I said in my Introduction "...It’s a variation on Harry goes back. Nothing too original..."

The reason I posted it was to find out what other people thought. Your thoughts mirrored mine. That is one reason I didn't continue it. I couldn't find a way to make it more interesting.

Scruffy1