I am really really loving this story. It is just the sort of thing I love to read and you write it beautifully.
Though the only thing i didn't like was the 'Franklyn' part because Frank's name is just plain Frank. Sorry but it bugs me when people call him Franklyn or something like that when it is just plain Frank!.
Author's response
Hey thanks for reviewing. Thanks for the comment about the name, i mean't to check up on that but then forgot so i've updated it to the correct name. Thank You.
It's a bit of a dark story for me but just an idea i had to write. I know it's totally out of character. Thanks for reading :)