Review for Slayer Story

Slayer Story

(#) okokoiz2kool 2009-01-05

Well, you're a good writer, but you have some awkward phrasing every no and then like "angry turtle". It's cute and odd, but awkward nonetheless because it doesn't bring any images to mind.

I like the concept of a child being the protagonist

There were several opportunities for elaboration and more... depth into the characters, but it was overall well written