Ok, you are writing about an eleven year old kid, you do know that?
Eleven year old´s don´t look "intimidating" and if they try most people will laugh at them.
I don´t normaly care that characters act older then they are since i don´t want to read some fucking fluff where Harry is a happy kid but this just set me off.
Also the story was very short, you should try to get at least 3k characters in every chapter you post.
Author's response
the kid is thirteen the story is still unraveling... stay tuned