Hmmm... The 'summaries' are actually still too longwinded and lack the particular humour that makes things like 'movie-a-minute' funny. This way, the americanised dialogue just sounds out of character.
Author's response
It's supposed to be out of character. That's the joke. And I'm not exactly sure what a 'movie-a-minute' is. AND the 'summary' wasn't just a 'summary'. I couldn't put an author's note in the story without it becoming part of the story, so I had to put the author's note in the summary.
On Whofic.com, it has a 'real' summary. I apologize for any inconvinence this might have caused. Anyway, look at my stuff on Whofic if you must, and you'll see that my summaries are not like this at all. But, then again, Whofic lets the author give notes separate to the story.
I wasn't sure how well this would be taken on a non Who site, so I did my best at explaining what I felt I should. I realise the summary was too long, but it wasn't all a summary anyway.
Did you not like any of my story at all?
You know what they say about not saying anything nice...
I think I'll stick to Whofic for now. The reviewers are actually helpful.