Review for Gawking


(#) vampyGee 2009-07-16

hmmmmmmmmmmmmm, not sure but are you new to writing ncr fanfics? You idea is moderatly good, but your writing needs a little improvement.
also, maybe a chapter should me a little more than just a paragraph?, add a little more detail, like what kelli looks like, and don't make gee the only kid in the emo corner.