i would have rather that dumbles think the fire was Dark rather then poppy telling him that it was phoenix... though i am sure you have your own machanics working around in your head... dumbles too quicky jumped to the 'wand is protecting' him... i would have liked to see a private conversation between Dumbles and Olivanders. now, wouldn't that make for an interesting conversation...
harry is perhaps a little toooo happy go lucky at times... i would not imagine that he would be comfortable rolign around with 2 girls... especially since he would have much experience with friends at all...
on the whole quite good, but i was looking for some nuturing to be required for harry to pull him out of his shelf.