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The Day The Magic Died
The Day The Magic Died
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Ithilwen
2005-12-21
Oh that explains it. You're not Nightspore. So, the word repetition about which I was speaking:
You use the word "day" three times in the first paragraph, which is pretty short. The word "flick" or "flicked" also gets a little too much play. Etc.