FicWad

Writing is a great way to express what you're feeling and just get it out there. You captured the emotion of the moment.

If i can make a suggestion without people jumping all over me - just re-read stuff for grammar clarity (even if it is written emotionally, you'll evolve more as a writer by paying attention to that sort of stuff).

For instance, take a sentence like:

"The words replayed in my head as I sighed, before looking at the grass I sat on, my black hair curtaining my face."

You could try something like: "The words replayed in my head. I sighed and stared down at the grass where I sat, my black hair fell in my face like a thin curtain ..."

Sometimes it seems like adding a comma between actions is the thing to do, but watch the grammar of that and make sure everything is in the right tense.

Creativity is an important part of writing, but getting all the technical stuff down can never hurt you, only make your writing better.