Kimr has it right. It is interesting, and orignal.
But you really need to separate the paragraphs so that people can actually READ the mess.
also, and these are just a few of the mistakes, its Minerva, not mirvina or miverna. its aforementioned, not fore mentioned.
If you want to continue writing, get a beta. soon.
But beyond the numerous mistakes, it was interesting, but it does need some back-story.