Review for Frightful magic

Frightful magic

(#) falcon_phoenix 2009-09-01

Kimr has it right. It is interesting, and orignal.

But you really need to separate the paragraphs so that people can actually READ the mess.

also, and these are just a few of the mistakes, its Minerva, not mirvina or miverna. its aforementioned, not fore mentioned.

If you want to continue writing, get a beta. soon.

But beyond the numerous mistakes, it was interesting, but it does need some back-story.