Aww, come on!
I was soo hoping Gerard would tell Rae (Hehe, that's my name too ;) ) that 'Shawn' is his brother Mikey!
It's like a new twist on an old plot, and is just compelling!
The only advice I'd give is to, please use more description! You describe the drawings and the characters action perfectly, just please describe their clothes and the setting more!
I really can't wait for more!
Love Rae xo