Very good, really! Job well done. But it's a tad short. I think if you elongated the plot line, it'd be even better. But very original and creative. Kudos! :)
Author's response
I apologize for the story being so short. Being able to write more in a single story is something I definately want to acheive in the future. And thank you so much for the advice as to elongate the plot line. It will be very helpful for the next time I write.