Original indeed. I'm reviewing this from my phone so if it's all like bad, sorry!
was the lines in italics lyrics from a song? I think this could be used as a metaphor too. (Well if it wasn't already) I like the way it just ran so smoothly.
F oxox.
Author's response
The italics were not from lyrics, but that's an interesting thought. Same with the metaphor idea. I wish I would've come up with those...
Anyways, the italics were basically supposed to be a bit of foreshadowing. The italics were influenced by the regular text, and therefore a result of what was occurring.
Does that make any sense whatsoever? Or am I just rambling nonsense again? Because lately that's all I've been doing ;)