well well well, what a interesting story (is it me or did I just sound like count olaf from unfortunate events)
anyways I would like to say this story is off to a good start (in my book) also I laughed at your author's note. not at you but at your attitude with the sand box.
anywho, the story has good description. not to long and not to short. could use some smut but I am pretty sure that will come along soon and I will review later on in the story