Review for Harry Potter: New beginnings

Harry Potter: New beginnings

(#) ironau 2006-09-17

just so you know three is NOT the first prime number.

Overall the story has the potential to be quite enjoyable, but it is unploished right now. The prologue is to short and disjoint. I was a great idea to attempt to set the tone for the metality of a war weary Harry. The flashback that you used in latter chapters would have been better presented as mournful reminicence from Harry. The prologue felt more like a bullet list of things that have happend instead of an actually story.

The vicious and jeolous Nevillie is interesting and I look forward to see if you can bring a new twist to the controlling dumbledore concept. I can't wait to see nev break down because it seems that even dumbledore is treating nev as not quite good enough.

I was disaapointed to not see any further consequencies from the Draco/Harry duel. though I think it will lead to a draco neville teamup.