Loving the new chapter. Still can't wait to read the rest of it! Although there are a few errors here and there. You will probably want to edit the whole story for all the errors that were made after you finished the story.
There's a few places where quotes should/shouldn't be, figured you'd want to know.
Author's response
Heya Richard.
Glad you're still reading. This is both fun and fascinating to write while exhausting at the same time.
Errors: Yeah. I proof it five or seven times and i alwasy find ore little errors when i read it on-line.
(Le Sigh!)
Alorkin
Like that...I always find more little errors when I read it on-line.