To be honest with you mate as you can see by the ratings the story has recieved this is really really bad, please go and take a look at other popular stories and see how they are written, your spelling and gramar are so bad it makes people go "hell no" and go to another story the plot made no sense and some of the words were just not something that word be in a proper story im not trying to be mean but if you want to be serious about this learn from other stories
Author's response
this was a first attempt I made in awhile so Iam a little rusty and it was not beta'd but that is being corrected