Looks interesting, but you need to improve the look and spacing of the text.
It looks almost like a complete wall of text, put a blank line between paragraphs and a couple between sections. Try breaking a paragraph into more than one section.
Try reading the piece out loud only taking a breath at each full stop/period and not pausing until you reach the end of the paragraph.
Put quote marks (" speech ")around character speech.
Separate special effects / sounds from the rest of the paragraph (unless it's made by something being described in the sentence).
I've not used the FicWad editor / uploader so I don't know what you can do now it has been uploaded, but if you can spend a few minutes to just tidy up the presentation of the piece this will improve the readability.
Author's response
thank you for your positive feedback I had not had my beta reader look at it before posting the story that problem has been rectified so take another look and tell me what you think