I really love this story! It's adorable. I'm lovin how Gerard keeps on saying, "Fwankie". Tis adorable to the fullest extent.
But...I have a down side. When you use all caps, I find it a bit...I don't know, annoying? Otherwise I think your nice and stuff.
I'm glad you like it! I hope it isn't corny. And I totally understand that you hate the all caps. I only use all caps for screaming and when just a word is in all caps it's because it would of been underlined if it could have been. Thank you for telling me, I will definitly try to keep the all capitals to a minimum.