The format of this fic is the kind of format that makes me not like something right off. As such I didn't even read or rate it. Try putting it into a #rd person POV and you'll get a lot more ratings/reviews
Author's response
This story is written to represent something like a TV shooting script - not something that would be in first person. Watch a few episodes of 'Top Gear' on YouTube or Hulu and I hope you'll see what I mean.
If you don't like the format, don't read it. But thanks for the review.
rdgale