Right, I think the storyline is really good and I really would like you to keep writing it, but, I think you shouldn't rush into things. It kind of seems like that's what your doing, you should drag things out a bit more to give it more tension but don't drag it out for too long (then it just gets boring) and make the chapters longer, but other than that, it's really good(: (OH and another thing, did Gerard bite Frank or Mikey?:S that bit confused me!)
Author's response
i am trying to make the chapters longer and he bit frank :) i had to show the story from gerards point which may of seemed rushed to anounce the whole vampire thing but its really a tiny bit of the story, thanks for the reveiw and i will try and make the chapters longer, katt x