A good start, but there are a few problems. Firstly, paragraphs and line spacing. When you write dialogue, you always LEAVE A LINE WHEN THE NEXT PERSON IS SPEAKING. This will make your work a hell of a lot more neater and proffesional to look at, let alone easier to read.
I like your characters, but maybe you need to step up a bit with your descriptions of them. This'll help the reader get to know them better. And lastly, your sentences are a tad robotic, i.e. "I woke up. I got out of bed. I got ready. I went to Starbucks." Ya see?
I'm sorry, I really do think your story has potential, but they did make editing for a reason.
Author's response
Thanks a lot, this is my first story. So I am still trying to get the hang off it. I appreciate your criticism and I am going to try and improve on these things.