Jeez, I planned this review/critic/flame so well then I look up and see JCproductions has already done it for me. Thanks a bunch.
She/He is right though. The fact that you're dyslexic doesn't change the fact that there are such things as spell check and dictionaries. Grammar is abysmal, capital letters need to be at the beggining of sentences and full stops at the end. Basic elementary stuff, kid. Which you are lacking.
I could go on and on about grammar but yeah, it's been said. I thought "This is one of the worst mini chapters I've read" was a little harsh, I've certainly read worse. But characterisation is a must and this story is starved of it.
Author's response
Writing fanfiction isnt all about spelling etc. Its about people writing stories about what they like. And yes, spelling and things are important but not everyone is good at that sort of stuff. And you dont KNOW me, you dont know anything ABOUT me so I understand what you mean and stuff but honestly change the record love. Thank you for the review :)