Besides the lack of spacing between paragraphs I am really interested as to where this story will go. Just one question is this a crossover? Interesting concept and I really enjoy the creativity:-)
Just make sure that there is spacing between the paragraphs and develop the characters a bit more and this story will be both easy to read and extremely interesting.
Très bien fait! (Very Well done!), just make sure you put spacing in between the paragraphs, that was the main issue that I had:-)