Review for I'm Not Sure If This Matters

I'm Not Sure If This Matters

(#) SZSmith 2006-10-06

HOLY MOSES TEH LAST LINE ALWAYS GETS ME. I could've read this earlier but i was youtubing and all. Anywho, this was a cute chapter. Your writing had improved again, it's amazing. Let me go back and find some on my favorite parts....

"My breathing was shallow and the only sound that was coming in was the light pitter-patter of the sprinkling rain drops, those mid-summer ones, you know?"

the imagry in that was beyond anything you've written before. It has depth and meaning, and gets you into the characters mind almost.

""Can we be perfect now?" I asked and Patrick shook his head.

"No," I frowned slightly and creased my eyebrows together.

"Why?" I asked and he smirked to himself.

"Because we can only get amazinger from here on out," "

well obviously that would be a favorite line. It's priceless and beautiful. End.

Well basically, I love this story will all my heart plus the universe and beyong etc. etc. you know the drill. wellll i must go sleep or my dad might just stab me. okay, bai!