Review for All's fair in Love and War.

All's fair in Love and War.

(#) RhiannaNekozawa 2011-08-17

Heya Erin. Betcha can't guess who it is ;)

Anyway, this is good. You have a very human way of writing, which is both refreshing and exciting to read, and which I, personally, enjoy immensely.
I like the themes around normal teenage crushes and how sometimes you just want them to go away.
One thing you could try to work on is punctuation in speech, which I know I've mentioned before but you do it when you're writing normally so I don't see why the fact that this is on a computer should change anything.

Rhi