hello. i dont think this story is a trainwreck like it says. i like where its going to just needs so work, like spaceing, like when people talk put spaces in the convo stuff like that and a few words are spelled wrong, and mabye put a little more fluff in your story, not a lot just some. just giving some pointers. if you need any more help just message me, ill be glad to help. :)
can't wait to read more.